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  • This one was a pretty stark contrast, so let’s get into it.

    What did you think of it?

    I liked it quite a bit. The worldbuilding aspect of it only kind of clicked for me, but the characters were excellent. I know this is part of a series, and I came away from the book genuinely wanting to know what happens next to most of the (surviving) characters.

    As I think back on it now, it’s the characters that work so well in this book. If I were rating out of ten, the plot would only get a six or so. The worldbuilding would maybe get a four or five. The writing itself, even, probably just a five or six. There were some genuinely lovely passages here or there, but generally the non-dialog felt overlong or muddled. The action sequences varied in that regard. Some of them, especially the scenes that weren’t carrying a ton of plot scaffolding, were great. The more important action scenes, though, got quite muddy.

    I’m not sure how much I liked the structure of it. The book starts with Locke as a child and then jumps to the “present” of the story. It goes back to the childhood bits (or, later on, short little history lessons of the world) between every chapter (each of which are divided into individual numbered sections)… I can’t begin to imagine how I’d tell someone what my favorite section of the book was…

    This is a much less disciplined breakdown than the first book, but then it’s a more complex thing. That said, it does prove out the idea that if you have an interesting character doing interesting things, the rest kind of falls into place. Locke is a great character (and Jean Tannen is maybe even better). Even the supporting cast is extremely fun (barring one guy, but then he’s not supposed to be fun).

    Thinking about structure, though, think that if you laid out the main story with the idea of Locke as the main character, it would follow the arc of three act structure pretty cleanly.

    I think I liked it less than Le Guin’s book, but that’s pretty stiff competition.

    Onward to Uprooted.

    Initial thoughts – The Lies of Locke Lamora by Scott Lynch

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    Sep 24
  • Every time there was an economic downturn that resulted in my losing my role in the past, I’ve gone back to school.

    In 2009 when the publisher I worked for went out of business, I went and earned an MFA in screenwriting. Then in 2014, when my job of two years ended in Baltimore, I went and got my JD.

    I was laid off a while back and have been having a hard time of it. During that time I joked that I would have to find another job because I couldn’t just go back to school again.

    Well….

    I’m probably going to go back to school. But this time, it’s cooler than Baltimore Law School… even cooler than LA film school… This is a fun sentence to write.

    I’m going to get my PhD in Literature and Linguistics by studying and translating Romanian folklore and fiction in the Carpathian mountains for basically free.

    Both myself and my brother have joked about changing my last name to “Acula” after I finish the degree.

    Passport renewal is on the way and I’m already reaching out to PhD supervisors and learning some basic Romanian.

    So this space may get a lot more interesting soon.

    MOAR SCHOOL!

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    Sep 18
  • I made a few changes to my list – a couple of additions, one possible subtraction.

    I also tried to create a reading order based on a couple of different criteria:

    • vary the eras of fantasy somewhat
    • vary the word counts
    • try and avoid tonal repetition

    So the new order (with additions and, I suppose, subject to change is)

    1. A Wizard of Earthsea
    2. The Lies of Locke Lamora
    3. Uprooted
    4. The Name of the Wind
    5. Empire of Sand
    6. In the Shadow of Lightning
    7. The Curse of Chalion
    8. Sword of Shannara

    So we’re already well in to Locke Lamora. Expect a response to that one soon.

    Updated List

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    Sep 4
  • This is the first book in this whole long process we’re doing, so this structure is sure to evolve and change as we go. That being said, here’s the reaction to Wizard of Earthsea, which I finished last night.

    This book was written as YA, which I didn’t know going in. Granted, that’s late-60’s YA, so it’s not as clearly for kids or teens as what fits the genre now. The main character, for example, spends the majority of the book (as it struck me anyway) as an adult, albeit a young one. Near the end, there’s confirmation that he’s 19, and had been living and working as an adult for at least a couple of years (mostly just sailing around getting in trouble, but as an adult).

    Maybe it’s a New Adult (NA) epic fantasy?

    It read to me more like the Tolkien-y or “mythic” kind of fantasy – more of an all-ages read than just for kids. It did feel short, though (physical copy is coming today, so I’ll reassess_.

    What did you think of it?

    It felt like the right start. The overall style is much more “telling a story” than many of the more recent fantasy books that I’ve read. This shift in tone was a good mental reset: there are genre conventions, but it’s a big, wide genre. This story feels like one being told in world, and it lets things unfold in a direct, natural way.

    It also does a lot of heavy lifting for the world-building. A tone of “in those days, the isle of ____ was known for ____. This was long before ____” is immersive and develops the world in ways that can be vague or expanded later but still ensure that the world feels real and that the reader is going to know what’s important. There’s a lot of talk on some reddit forums about “the iceberg method” — basically that the writer should have a huge amount of backstory and thought behind things that only surface in the story a little (top of the iceberg) or, maybe more popularly, that the writer should at least hint at there being more to these worldbuilding ideas when there really isn’t (yet); they could then go back and flesh them out later.

    I don’t know which it is, but there’s a feeling of a sketch of a whole big world here, and the only bits we really need to know are told to us explicitly. There’s a lot of place names and island names sprinkled around… did LeGuin have all that fully fleshed out in her head when she wrote it? Maybe. I doubt it. But I won’t be surprised to learn that more Earthsea books flesh out and develop tons of things just dropped in here to make the world feel real and lived-in and interesting.

    The theme of the book is really strongly conveyed – there is power in names and the main character has to learn to be a full person and to own his name/character fully in order to find his place in the world. He starts off as an arrogant kid, oversteps and nearly dies, gets humbled, tries to correct his overstep, and ultimately understands that he can’t be whole without facing his failings and his potential directly. There’s plenty of this that even feels on the nose after the fact – names are secrets and give power, the adversary is literally called his shadow throughout (and eventually comes to look like/be mistaken for him). To her credit as a writer, Le Guin never makes this feel obvious in the moment… but it helps for the ideas to click into place easily when we get there.

    Characters

    The characters are generally well-drawn, though not extremely well developed beyond the main character, Ged. This adds to the “told tale” vibes here. One thing that jumped out at me was the way that the women are written. There aren’t very many of them in the book, and none has a ton of “screen time.” Still, I remember all three women clearly and have a stronger sense of them than almost anyone else in the book.

    Of course we get Ged, who’s the main character. Beyond that, the only men that I feel made a strong impression were his friend and his rival from wizard school and his old master from before he went off to school. I have a decent sense of each, at least at certain points in the story, but I have a similar sense about the three women even though (at a guess) each of the above-mentioned men gets two to three times as many words written about them (probably much more) than all the women combined.

    Maybe it’s because the author is a woman that she’s able to weave these in so memorably… or maybe it’s a matter of cultural expectation and the perspective of remaining largely close on Ged’s point of view… Like, do I remember the women better because I remember how focused I was on women when I was, like Ged, an inexperienced teenage boy? Or is this conveyed directly (and not just me) for the same reason? Or is Le Guin just great at drawing out interesting and unique female characters easily?

    Plot

    By and large, the plot held together and moved at a solid clip. It never felt rushed, and it rarely dragged. I did find the “shipwrecked on an island” bit to be a little tedious, but even that was paid off with some detail about how the couple got there and about what ultimately happened to them (a benefit of the “told tale” tone – you can digress with interesting bits without losing the reader).

    I felt for a while like there was going to be a bigger quest that this story led into, but I think that’s more a reflection of where this whole thing is going. I imagine the author feeling as she wrote this that there was a ton of world to explore later, and that seems to come through in the writing.

    The climax was, for me, not great.

    I absolutely acknowledge that some of this was due to knowing how much of the book was left – with more than 10% remaining of the book, I thought the final confrontation was going to be longer and more challenging. When it wrapped up the shadow story and then was just “and they went home” and “he went on to do more cool stuff,” I was a bit surprised.

    The rest of the book was an essay by the author (that I resisted reading so I could get my reaction down first).

    Endings are hard, I know, and

    SPOILER ALERT

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    The idea of the shadow having used Ged’s true name to nearly kill him only for Ged to realize, in the end, that he knew the shadow’s true name all along because it was him, too (true name: Ged)… that’s elegant and feels right… but in actual execution it just read as kind of quick and easy.

    I think it may grow on me, but my initial impression (maybe because I was reading faster and more into the story by the end) is that Ged’s summoning of the shadow and his confrontation with it in the snow and even his later temptation from that creepy shadow stone were more fleshed out and exciting than the end of the whole story.

    final thoughts

    It was a fast, fun read with a style that I want to absorb. I added Uprooted to my list because, having read it before, I know that I wanted to analyze and hopefully take in some of the vibe of a twist on the familiar told tale – A Wizard of Earthsea does a lot of the same thing, but I had no idea when I opened it.

    I come away from it feeling a bit underwhelmed by the final resolution, but also wanting more. I want to know the next things that Ged gets up to that make him so important to the audience. I want details on his quests and whatnot. I want to know if he and his friend’s little sister get together (as seems obvious from this story).

    Were I not in the middle of this “read these books and respond” mission I set myself, I’d be looking for the next Earthsea book to start reading today… so I guess it’s by and large a success for me.

    More thoughts, I suppose, when I do the later dissection/breakdown bit, but for now, definitely a fan. I had only ever read some Le Guin short stories before, and now I understand that I was really missing out.

    Initial thoughts – A Wizard of Earthsea – Ursula K. LeGuin

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    Aug 31
  • As I work through laying the groundwork for this project, I found an exercise that I’m planning to undertake. It directly addresses my feeling that, while I have read a lot of fantasy novels of the sort that I intend to write, its been a while and I don’t feel like I love many.

    Am I feeling like maybe I can do better?

    Well, sure – in a sense, anyway. I feel like I have something to contribute that would be engaging and fun and all that stuff… but I’m also maybe not close enough to the genre right now to really do my story justice…?

    I don’t know.

    But here’s the exercise (from James Scott Bell):

    1. Get a half-dozen books of the genre you intend to write
    2. Read the first one (like an audience member)
    3. Spend a day afterwards thinking about the book. Make some notes (Did you like it? Did it move you? Did you connect with the characters? Did it drag? Is it memorable? etc..)
    4. Read the next books in the same fashion: read for pleasure, spend some time noting observations.
    5. Go back to the first book. Using notecards, write the following for EACH SCENE: setting, POV character, two-line scene summary, scene type (action, setup, etc..) and whether it makes you want to read on – why or why not?
    6. Repeat with other books
    7. Read through the stacks
    8. Spend some time laying them out, dividing them into three act structure
    9. Be awesome at plot and celebrate.

    I started the first book and am about halfway through. Here’s my selections:

    A Wizard of Earthsea – Ursula K. LeGuin (I’ve never read it, it’s a classic, I love many of her stories).

    Sword of Shannara – Terry Brooks (also never read, also a classic. Wanted to hit some major genre milestones that I wasn’t familiar with).

    The Name of the Wind – Patrick Rothfuss (seems to be extremely well regarded, especially from a writing standpoint. Relatively recent big hit).

    Uprooted – Naomi Novik (the only one of these I’ve already read. Maybe my favorite book of hers – and she’s one of my top 10 authors. The tone and style here are targets for most of my writing).

    Empire of Sand – Tasha Suri (I really have no idea here. Unfamiliar with the book and the author, but it’s well-regarded in the genre and published within the last decade).

    In the Shadow of Lightning – Brian McClellan (another semi-blind buy. It’s a book one of an epic fantasy series published in the last five years. Seems to be well-regarded. I guess we’ll see).

    If anyone has other/better ideas I’m open to adding another book or two. The goal here is to dig in and do some analysis on books that are:

    • In the genre (Fantasy; specifically high fantasy and ideally human-centric. Think ASoIF rather than DnD novels)
    • Well-regarded and well-written
    • Not first person (ideally)
    • Successful (recently)
    • Second World and vaguely medieval setting

    Anything important I’m missing?

    Crash Course

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    Aug 28
  • I’ve been looking at a lot of different books on outlining over the last week or so. Yes, it is absolutely a way to procrastinate, but it isn’t JUST a way to procrastinate.

    The truth is that I’m working on a complex idea with at least three storylines/POV characters that I expect to stretch across a handful of books. I was only able to write my first book (not even that well, it turns out) with a decent outline, and that was somewhat more straightforward… so an outline feels essential.

    But man, some of these outline books/tips/guides are awful. I don’t just mean that they won’t work for me, I mean they couldn’t possibly help anyone.

    I tried to return one to Amazon because it was largely just a summary of different styles of outlining. Like, a page or two on three act structure, then a page or two on the hero’s journey, then a page or two on the concept of using notecards… the font was huge, the editing was nonexistent, the information was both useless and available elsewhere, and the writer giving the advice had only ever published other books on how to get published.

    His real secret seems to be writing books about writing books instead of actually writing books.

    Anyway, I asked for a refund and got it, but Amazon didn’t want this book back.

    Feels like a commentary on the book, huh?

    Okay, I’m done procrastinating by writing about reading about outlining. Time to get at least one layer closer to actually doing something.

    Outlining

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    Aug 23
  • A billionaire mad man destroyed the east wing of the white house and carved his name onto national monuments. His friend took food and medicine from starving children and is in a race with other obscenely rich people to build a secret base on the moon. Or mars. These people have blown up a school. They are now giving their select goons electroshock gloves, which let them incapacitate anyone in seconds.

    This is comic book villain shit.

    I don’t actually follow comic books all that much, but I think that Lex Luthor became president in the DC comics at some point. And you know what, he is a literal supervillain, but he at least wasn’t robbing the country WHILE supervillaining. He was already rich. He didn’t need it.

    The real life version, apparently, has a deeper bottomless hole that needs money than Lex Luthor, though.

    This is america.

    (unrelated, but if you haven’t watched the old video of Donald Glover’s “This is America” video with other songs playing over it, you should. The way it matches up with “Call Me Maybe” is amazing.)

    comic book villain shit

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    Aug 14
  • I’ve been in the trenches, writing scenes and reviewing outlines and generally ramping up and actually writing this first book (I think it’s the first book). But I’m also having to think about things like names and maps and other fantasy-adjacent issues.

    For now, I’m doing this sort of trick:

    ____ looked up at the towering castle of ____, perched on the highest point of ____, a rock that a dozen armies had dashed themselves apart against.

    Which is fine for now. And I even have some names I’m using for some characters that I will absolutely not not use, too. For example, I have a character who’s a girl from a vaguely Scandinavian place – snow and ice and mountains and gruff bearded men considered kind of barbaric by other cultures – and I’m calling her Bjork in my draft.

    The blanks and the Bjorks will need to be addressed sooner or later, and the names have more significance than just a blank can really capture. The names (and inspiration behind them) ought to inform the story, at least a little (or so I’m telling myself at present).

    So I’m reading about the formation of the holy roman empire and looking at maps and names of places from a thousand years ago. I’m looking into naming conventions of various languages (your “burghs” vs. “grads” vs. “shires” vs. “tons/towns” etc…) and trying to see what fits for a story vaguely inspired (think GoT being inspired by the War of the Roses) by a sort of viking civilization and medieval england and the holy roman empire and the crusades and byzantine empire.

    It’s kind of a lot, so the writing is scattered.

    But there’s plenty I can write that doesn’t need to be held up by thinking up names.

    And I’ll keep writing that stuff while I keep thinking up names.

    I’d love to have that locked in fairly early, as I think using “London” in the draft and then doing a find-and-replace to make all of those “Middenshire” or whatever.

    Not only does that cost me the character of the city itself, but it also could lead to some embarrassing typos.

    True story, when I was a kid I had the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles Album. Not the one from a movie or anything, I mean the one they released. The one where they “toured” and appeared at theme parks and Raphael played the saxophone because that was the cool, sarcastic instrument of the 90s, I guess.

    Anyway, the tape came with an insert with all the lyrics.

    And I guess someone had done a find-and-replace late in the game that none of the editors noticed, changing all the “don”s to “donatello”.

    Which led to the memorably typo that lives in my brain 35 years later from the song “Pizza Power.”

    The word ‘gourmet’ just donatellon’t exist

    (Don’t go listen to it, but if you do, notice that the lyric is “the word ‘gourmet’ just don’t exist”)

    I hold myself to a higher standard than the TMNT Out of Our Shell album.

    Worldbuilding

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    Aug 9
  • Here’s a bit of my upcoming novel, completely out of context. All I’ll tell you about it is that it’s intended to be one of several short, standalone bits (so not about a main character or directly tied to their story).

    ALSO – I’m using “the lord” in this draft, but I expect something more unique later. It works here, but I’m working on developing the cosmology, and I think that’ll force a bit of changes in the draft scene below.

    (more…)

    Excerpt

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    Aug 6
  • So I’ve gotten back into working on my fantasy story, and it’s got me thinking about how to structure things.

    The first book I ever wrote used the structure I learned from screenplays and from film school. There’s a bit of variation on this, but generally it’s a three act structure. I was specifically taught an eight sequence method that broke down roughly this way:

    1. First sequence introduces the main character and gets us to the problem
    2. Second sequence takes the main character “into another world.” This would be where Dorothy lands in Oz and realizes she’s not in Kansas, etc…
    3. Third sequence is the first quarter of act two. To tell the truth, I don’t really recall what the milestones are of act two so much, just that there are four sequences therein.
    4. The midpoint is the end of sequence four, and somewhere in the latter half there’s something I remember being called the “turn or burn” moment. I think this was basically the moment where the protagonist is totally committed to seeing things through (or, I guess, walking away, but that’s not really how most film stories work).
    5. The last bit of act two, sequence six, is, as I recall, the “dark night of the soul” when the bad guy has the upper hand and all is lost and whatnot. This is after Obi Wan gets killed in A New Hope (I think).

    I’m probably doing this all a disservice. The book was by Paul Gulino, and while I am doing a bad job of describing it, I’ve internalized a lot of the structure in it. It’s pretty good.

    For a movie.

    But this is a book (or a series of books), and I’m having a tough time figuring out how to structure it.

    My initial thought was to do a rough sort of 3 act sequence outline for each POV character and then just kind of toss them together. When I attempt that, though, I end up having to kill time with some characters who have full arcs over the course of the full story but not so much in the first book.

    Then there’s the approach of creating one overarching structure, but that kind of falls apart as I fall into the habit of writing it like a script. I’ve become so good at taking that structure and making it what I learned to make it that it’s difficult to get past about 30,000 words. This book wants to be more like three times that, so that’s a problem.

    Right now I’m doing a lot of free writing and scene writing that I know I want to be in there, but don’t know how it’ll all fit together.

    I need a Maxwell Perkins.

    And speaking of Thomas Wolfe, I’ve also considered taking up one of his books and using it as a device for telling my own story. I’ve never read any of his work aside from a short story, but I know that he was from Asheville and wrote a book that made him a bit of an Asheville pariah.

    So maybe I get that book, read and analyze, and also use it to frame my own experiences in Asheville becoming a pariah and learning you can’t go home again. Not sure if that’s a book or a blog idea.

    Kind of a mopey, literary, Appalachian Julie and Julia.

    structure

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    Aug 3
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